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Unchained Monster
Posted: Sun May 08, 2005 8:47 pm
by Aerick Ravenheart
I pick at the stars
like scabs
the constellations
running wild
In the middle of
the night
screaming like
a banshee voiced
child
And I understand
what I've gotta
go through
And I don't give
a damn if I do
If I do
Stuck in the end
out of the beginning
fuck you, my friend
as I see you there
grinning
At me so wreckless
unchained and
unabashed
the hopeless and lame
take another bath
pour salt on the wound
just to heal the soul
I dont know what to do
I've lost control
I just don't no what to do
I Lost Control
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 2:53 pm
by 4X541N7
Awesome...I dig the hell out of this..."Pick at the stars...Like scabs..."..

Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 4:47 pm
by Aerick Ravenheart
Thank you(takes a bow). I listened to WIth Teeth-NIN like five times in a row before I wrote this one, so it may have a tad Reznor influence to the lyrics. It's got music to it to, which I wrote on my geetar.

Thanks again, man....glad you dug it so much.
Posted: Mon May 09, 2005 5:30 pm
by 4X541N7
Aerick Ravenheart wrote:Thank you(takes a bow). I listened to WIth Teeth-NIN like five times in a row before I wrote this one, so it may have a tad Reznor influence to the lyrics. It's got music to it to, which I wrote on my geetar.

Thanks again, man....glad you dug it so much.
Ew...Don't imply that this was Reznor inspired...It's good...Don't take that away...lol...I have alot of the music written for most of my songs on here...In fact...All things go as planned...I'll be recording tomorrow...So...Rock on...
Posted: Wed May 25, 2005 9:22 pm
by Aerick Ravenheart
LOL, not n2 NIN , huh? Well anyway, I am glad you liked it. Thanx
Posted: Sun May 29, 2005 9:52 am
by TiredUnhappy
I liked this one of yours, I'm just now catching on to your poetry, so far so great!
Keep posting them!
Posted: Thu Jun 09, 2005 12:38 am
by Aerick Ravenheart
Thank you TH! I appreciate the compliment....and I am always writing them. Check out the other couple o' dozen poems I wrote and tell me what you think of those as well. Dont be afraid to criticize or be open and honest. L8er!